https://boards.hellobee.com/ Pregnancy, Baby and Parenting blog, by Hellobee en Tue, 07 Apr 2026 05:35:40 +0000 https://boards.hellobee.com/topic/i-need-your-help#post-439372 Sat, 08 Dec 2012 18:49:25 +0000 mrsjyw 439372@https://boards.hellobee.com/ <p>@BabyLove: LOL thanks! I think I'm just phone-addicted to social media!! :P Nursing sessions usually~ </p> https://boards.hellobee.com/topic/i-need-your-help#post-439365 Sat, 08 Dec 2012 18:36:38 +0000 BabyLove 439365@https://boards.hellobee.com/ <p>Hi :) Thank you! Loving your photos on FB, seriously where do you find the time/energy!? </p> https://boards.hellobee.com/topic/i-need-your-help#post-439350 Sat, 08 Dec 2012 18:15:01 +0000 mrsjyw 439350@https://boards.hellobee.com/ <p>@BabyLove: good luck friend!!! read it and totally felt your passion!!!!! sending you all my thoughts and prayers for your mba admission! </p> https://boards.hellobee.com/topic/i-need-your-help#post-439312 Sat, 08 Dec 2012 17:17:29 +0000 BabyLove 439312@https://boards.hellobee.com/ <p>Omigosh, thank you! I really appreciate it. I've tweaked that paragraph in my document, not above :) and made it focus on why I want this particular program. </p> https://boards.hellobee.com/topic/i-need-your-help#post-439304 Sat, 08 Dec 2012 17:13:03 +0000 Cherrybee 439304@https://boards.hellobee.com/ <p>I just wanted to say that it's AWESOME! I think it reads beautifully and the first paragraph sucked me completely in, making me want to read more!! I'd echo the poster who said to draw less attention to your grades - it's like you're apologising for them, which with experience like yours and your obvious passion you simply don't need to do. You go girl!!! </p> https://boards.hellobee.com/topic/i-need-your-help#post-439297 Sat, 08 Dec 2012 16:51:15 +0000 BabyLove 439297@https://boards.hellobee.com/ <p>Haha- I understood and thank you! Makes total sense. I'm glad you noticed that. </p> https://boards.hellobee.com/topic/i-need-your-help#post-439277 Sat, 08 Dec 2012 16:08:29 +0000 MediaNaranja 439277@https://boards.hellobee.com/ <p>Sorry for typos and weird words, I am on my phone! </p> https://boards.hellobee.com/topic/i-need-your-help#post-439276 Sat, 08 Dec 2012 16:07:32 +0000 MediaNaranja 439276@https://boards.hellobee.com/ <p>Sounds good! You are obviously passionate about this subject. A few things: in the 2nd paragraph (or maybe 3rd?) there are 3 sentences in a row that start with "I worked..." I would sighs combine them or find a different way to say it so you aren't using the same words over and over. I agree w/ others that it is not necessary to bring up undergrad stuff (unless your gpa is below what is normally accepted for the program, in which case you should address it). Finally, I think you need to add a paragraph at the end showing why this program is a good fit "the msw program at university X is a great fit because...." This will show you have done your research (and is easy to tailor to many applications).</p> <p>Good luck! I am 3/4 through my masters program, and while it is exhausting it is also pretty cool :-) </p> https://boards.hellobee.com/topic/i-need-your-help#post-439263 Sat, 08 Dec 2012 15:38:56 +0000 BabyLove 439263@https://boards.hellobee.com/ <p>Thanks guys! I was told to actually address the undergrad directly but you're probably right. I didn't do so poorly that I need to beg for acceptance. My GPA was somewhere around 2.8. I think it's just one of my insecurities! </p> https://boards.hellobee.com/topic/i-need-your-help#post-439260 Sat, 08 Dec 2012 15:36:34 +0000 SweetMamaM 439260@https://boards.hellobee.com/ <p>I'm with T-Mom, frame the undergrad achievement differently. Don't address it directly, perhaps say something along the lines of how your passion and previous experience in the field will enable you to excel academically. If they have any queries about you being academically fit for the course, they can of course ask :)<br /> A little bit of butt kissing as to why you want to get into their particular programme never goes astray either! </p> https://boards.hellobee.com/topic/i-need-your-help#post-439248 Sat, 08 Dec 2012 15:26:28 +0000 T-Mom 439248@https://boards.hellobee.com/ <p>I am not in this field but I feel your passion through the statement! My only feedback is maybe to draw even less attention to your undergrad grades. I'm not sure it is necessary to have the line about your performance not being an indicator. It draws more attention to the subject, I would say. Also there was one word "victim's recovery" which I think you meant to say "a victim's recovery". Nice work! </p> https://boards.hellobee.com/topic/i-need-your-help#post-439223 Sat, 08 Dec 2012 14:54:27 +0000 BabyLove 439223@https://boards.hellobee.com/ <p>Omg, longest post everrrrrrr. I wanted to add that I'm not entirely done. But almost! </p> https://boards.hellobee.com/topic/i-need-your-help#post-439222 Sat, 08 Dec 2012 14:53:31 +0000 BabyLove 439222@https://boards.hellobee.com/ <p>Hey Guys! </p> <p>I haven't been on in a long time. Things have been soooo busy! And if life isn't enough to keep me busy, I want to go back to school. I've been paralyzed for years, thinking that I wasn't able to do it and that I wouldn't even get in cause my focus during my undergrad was on... well... parties, ugh. But I'm FINALLY ready to try. </p> <p>I'd like to go back to get my Masters in Social Work. And I need someone (or a lot of someones I guess :)) to proof and give feedback on my statement. I am not confident enough to ask the people I know! I also want unbiased feedback. I'm goin to paste it below. I know it's long, you don't have to read it all. But if you do, I truly appeciate it! Be kind, I'm really passionate about this stuff :)</p> <p>When I was seven years old my grandfather asked what I wanted to be when I grew up. I answered, emphatically that I wanted to be a super hero. At around 23 years old, I was asked by a friend why I worked so much. And with the same resolute tone as when I was seven, I responded saying, “Because I want to save the world”. The nickname my family has given me is Dreamer, inspired by John Lennon’s song “Imagine”. The lyrics have resonated with me since I was a child. While these examples are quirky, they’re poignant too. They capture the essence of who I am today.<br /> Immediately upon graduating from my undergraduate program I began working with the District Attorneys Office in Queens, New York as a Victim Advocate. Truthfully, I had no idea what position I’d be filling. My time there proved to be invaluable. It was during this time that I decided how best I could contribute to helping others. I worked directly with the victims of all felony crimes. I worked with the families of victims of some of the most heinous of offenses. Shortly into my work it became evident to me that this was a population that was widely underserved; whether it was due to socio-economic factors, subtle disparities within the legal system or simply a lack of knowledge regarding their rights and entitlements. It was gratifying to be able to assist our clients in locating their most fundamental needs but these were just the figurative layers of an onion. As our program slowly grew I was able to accompany victims as they attended court proceedings. It was important to me to ensure that they were able to seamlessly and successfully navigate the criminal justice system, that they were able to understand the jargon used by the attorneys and that an identified support system was available to them at a vulnerable time in their lives. But I always wanted to do more. They needed more.<br /> It is my ultimate goal to develop a program that serves as a comprehensive community driven approach in assisting victims recovery. In implementing such a service, my hope is to be able to helps victims live their lives to their fullest potential. I’d like to encompass all that I’ve done in my previous role and include a clinical component. I think using a more holistic approach could be more beneficial in supporting a victim’s resiliency. Additionally, I would venture to say that collaborating with as many community supports as possible would not only lend itself to victim’s recovery, but also to preventing re-victimization in many cases.<br /> I moved to Connecticut in 2010 at which time I began working for my current employer as a clinical liaison. This position has been an incredible opportunity to further build a foundation in the mental health field. I’ve been able to optimize my time working with the company by not only working amongst licensed clinicians, but also in working closely with Connecticut’s Department of Children and Families, Department of Development Services and The Department of Mental Health and Addiction Services. Through our work with these state agencies I’ve been able to seek out trainings, seminars and workshops on various topics. These opportunities in particular have been useful in teaching me how Licensed Clinical Social Workers can contribute to informing procedures and bolstering protective factors for children and their families. The work I do now parallels greatly with my previous position; and has reinforced my conviction for this field.<br /> In closing, I ask that you look further than my undergraduate achievements and consider my dedication to this field. I assure you my academic performance is not an indication of how I will perform going forward. It took me years to truly understand the impact I could have on the others, and longer still to be confident enough to pursue my masters.<br /> My path to personal growth has been long and winding. But I believe that I was always meant to arrive at Social Work. Thank you for your consideration. </p>